Thursday, June 14, 2007

Subliminal

It was cold. Ilooked down at my feet, coz I couldn't feel my toes. They were wrinkled and slightly muddy. A leaf was stuck on one of them. "I'll have to get myself a pedicure when i get back!"
Ooo, she's getting pedicures now whispered a raspy voice in my ear. My heart stopped for a second. i turned around and no one was there.
I began to walk faster.Almost marching. The quick movements of my arms made fingers colder than they already were.I shoved my hands into my pockets and continued to walk fast.
"You finally kawlled!!! Where've you bin" yelled a woman on her cell phone, her eyes beaming
with fake concern. She was sitting in her car that was parked along the side of the road. I looked at her and smiled to myself remembering something from before.
As i walked the wind got stronger and the large drops began to hurt as they fell on me. I realized that my hood wasn't doing a good job protecting my already aching head and my T-shirt was  beginning to get wet underneath the jacket. I took it off. Within sseconds I was soaked. I stretched out my arms and looked up into the night and said " Great! Life couldn't get better."
As i slapped my palms down, I heard a screech. I turned around to see a car skidding off the road, coming straight at me. I stood and stared at the bright yellow lights gaining on me, transfixed, like at that moment God decided to teach me a lesson for complaining.
The very next second, a truck came out from an intersection at full speed and rammed into the car.
I suddenl realized that it was the same car i saw a few minutes ago.

8 comments:

Random Dent Too said...

fuckin amazing piece! i especially loved the end!

wild child said...

heyyy...glad u liked it...not too proud of it tho'
read phantasmagoria.... lotsa fun...

EXPLODING SUN said...

Fuck. Brilliant.
How the hell do you manage in 15 lines to do that?

EXPLODING SUN said...

the first half- i know exactly exactly what ur talking about. I think it's brave of u to write it so clear.
I'm sorry if I was ever one of those.

Kevin Lobo said...

no seriously this is a super brilliant piece the kind where u can make short movies on....I got my heart beating faster abby....y do u wanna do a damn MBA....you have talent u know.....I dont know how fast u can write but there is this short story competion happening ...I ll mail u the link.... u need to delve deeper into your talent

wild child said...

THANX!!!!! tht was a really nice thing to say.... :D
But..im learning to make my peace with the fact tht i hafta sell out o the world....before i do things for myself....
unless i find myself a rich hot boyfriend...naaahhh...wont work..
:(

Joanne Fernandes said...

I think I have told you this like 7 times already today... "what the hell are you doing spending 12 long frying hours in XIMR every day .. this is crazzzy fucking shit .. you can manage to do in fifteen lines what some authors take 325 pages to do ... maybe don't think your decision to do an MBA but definitely think of harnessing this wonderful talent chick.. Hoping to read a lot more...

Unknown said...

fuck..ur good man..actually got goose bumps!!